Weird bahasa

I always see this in product's description label and really can't stand this kind of stupidity in their language. In english, the description sounds perfectly fine. When it is being translated to malay, it sounds terrible, like a standard three level bahasa melayu. My guess is the designer of the label uses translator like the altavista-babel fish or other online translator tool. Not only on warranty card, I see it on shampoo label, food can and etc.

Let me grab an example.

In English:

We shall always endeavour to serve our valuable customers to the best of our ability when pearls, jades amd other precious stones are delivered to us for setting. We shall however not to be responsible for any damage or loss due to fire, theft, robbery or any cause save, as hereinafter provided, covering any of the items so deliverd.

In Malay:

Tuan-tuan dan Puan-puan yang mengambil manek, jades, berlian dan lain-lain batunya untuk menempah barang-barang kemas. Kami tidak akan menanggung jawab, kalau benda-benda mereka yang rosakan daripada bakaran, rompakan dan lain-lain lagi.

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Shall I correct it as:
Kami akan memberikan perkhidmatan yang terbaik kepada mana-mana tempahan barang kemas yang diterima. Namun demikian kami tidak akan bertanggungjawab ke atas kerosakan atau kehilangan barangan akibat kebakaran, rompakan dan malapetaka yang lain.

Although my bahasa melayu are not too superb, I feel it is a lot better than the one in the label.

Perfectly fine lawyer-ed english

Standard three bahasa melayu

Go and check your shampoo. It has weird malay language. Fix them please.